Haiku: Tiptoeing

spring blossoms, warm smiles
fingers tiptoeing on skin
sweet dream whisperings

Submitted to Thursday Poets Rally Week 39:
hosted by Leo http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.blogspot.com/
and Jingle Thursday Poets Rally Week 39 (March 3-9, 2011)

24 thoughts on “Haiku: Tiptoeing

  1. I live in a country where there’s no difference between seasons, but reading this definitely made me feel spring and a smile creeps up. 🙂

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  2. Great write! The warmth of the words just flows through. I wish I could write a haiku, but I’m just too long winded.

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  3. Great description of how the seasons can creep up on us and how the weather can feature so heavily in our romances.

    Alos, it pleases me every time I see a Haiku written faithfully to its true form. So many miss the point and call all of their short poems Haiku.

    There is a nice combination here of season and emotion. I would say, however, to try to make a harsher juxtaposition next time between the two.

    Maybe try devoting the whole first line (in this example) to the spring and then the other two to the feeling it inspires.

    Just a suggestion though. Really, a nice Haiku as is.

    Keep it up!

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  4. Greetings:

    Hope all is well.

    Noting that you have been part of poets rally in the year of 2011,
    what an achievement, thanks for your outstanding contribution to us
    along the way, keep up the excellence. Best!

    Come join our poetry rally today if you wish to mingle and get inspired!

    A poem of your choice or a free verse is accepted.

    Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.

    Looking forward to seeing you share.
    Respect and hugs.
    xoxox

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